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Nobody in the lane, and nothing, nothing moving.
Blackberry bushes on either side, crushed flat and burned,
A winding, ashy alley, devoid of life, and a sea
Somewhere beyond it, out of sight. Blackberries,
Oh how longingly I remember them, round
baubles in the hedges, sweet
and wholesome, spilling purple blood on my grasping fingers,
surrendering their lives to my child self’s greed; they loved me not,
and I cared not, squashing their bodies into glass tombs. But no longer.

Overhead, the sky boils, heavy grey with ash and dust -
Scraps of charred cloth and old newspapers swirl past.
The only sound is of the screaming, sickly wind.
Crawling now, I do not think I will reach the sea.
The once green fields are burning still, churned and ruined by
cruel fire from the tortured sky.  Lying beside me in the road,
a blackened child, wearing a death mask of motionless flies - Even they
are dead now, withered in their bloody feast. I cannot believe in heaven.
I drag my perished form away, round one more bend.

The only thing ahead now is the sea.
From between the cliffs the hellish, howling wind strikes me,
forcing its hot sickness into my face.
Over the stench of fire, I detect the taste of salt.
Or is it the trick of a dying mind, escaping in memory?
A last effort brings me to the rocky, blasted face.
Looking on the churning, ruined sea, I give in.
I watch the waves, remember blackberries, and hear my heart
Beating and beating into poisoned, hateful silence.
©2008-2009 ~TheTwelve
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Author's Comments

As I already mentioned, *simplypoetry's January Prompt is writing responses to other poems. This is my response (sort of...) to Sylvia Plath's Blackberrying, which I've put below. It turned out a little dark. 0.o

Nobody in the lane, and nothing, nothing but blackberries,
Blackberries on either side, though on the right mainly,
A blackberry alley, going down in hooks, and a sea
Somewhere at the end of it, heaving. Blackberries
Big as the ball of my thumb, and dumb as eyes
Ebon in the hedges, fat
With blue-red juices. These they squander on my fingers.
I had not asked for such a blood sisterhood; they must love me.
They accommodate themselves to my milkbottle, flattening their sides.

Overhead go the choughs in black, cacophonous flocks ---
Bits of burnt paper wheeling in a blown sky.
Theirs is the only voice, protesting, protesting.
I do not think the sea will appear at all.
The high, green meadows are glowing, as if lit from within.
I come to one bush of berries so ripe it is a bush of flies,
Hanging their bluegreen bellies and their wing panes in a Chinese screen.
The honey-feast of the berries has stunned them; they believe in heaven.
One more hook, and the berries and bushes end.

The only thing to come now is the sea.
From between two hills a sudden wind funnels at me,
Slapping its phantom laundry in my face.
These hills are too green and sweet to have tasted salt.
I follow the sheep path between them. A last hook brings me
To the hills' northern face, and the face is orange rock
That looks out on nothing, nothing but a great space
Of white and pewter lights, and a din like silversmiths
Beating and beating at an intractable metal.

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:iconkrayt1138:
... You been playing Fallout 3?

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*meows and exits stage left* :stormtrooper:

"There are those who express themselves through words... Others do it through pictures... Luckily for me, I am both and neither at once." - A friend.
:iconthetwelve:
Lol, no. Though I did think of both Call of Duty 4 and your work while writing this.

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Like a cat in a tumble dryer O.0
:iconschemilix:
*Blinks* Nice image. Well 'nice'.

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Down on yer knees, certain to please,
If you're a girl, give it a whirl,
If you're a lad, straighten yer nads!
If you want some whore-ific action,
Schemilix guarantees satisfaction.

The Game.
:iconthetwelve:
Lol, yes, nice doesn't quite work here... :D

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Like a cat in a tumble dryer O.0
:iconkrayt1138:
CoD? That doesn't really give off the same feeling... But I can see the Wastelands in that description.

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*meows and exits stage left* :stormtrooper:

"There are those who express themselves through words... Others do it through pictures... Luckily for me, I am both and neither at once." - A friend.
:iconthetwelve:
Isn't CoD the one where you crawl out of the chopper crash and die in the nuclear wasteland? I may be mistaken as to which game it was...

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Like a cat in a tumble dryer O.0
:iconkrayt1138:
Yeah, it is actually... I was more thinking about the Chernobyl part.

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*meows and exits stage left* :stormtrooper:

"There are those who express themselves through words... Others do it through pictures... Luckily for me, I am both and neither at once." - A friend.
:iconschemilix:
XD

--
Down on yer knees, certain to please,
If you're a girl, give it a whirl,
If you're a lad, straighten yer nads!
If you want some whore-ific action,
Schemilix guarantees satisfaction.

The Game.
:iconthetwelve:
Mmm, the Chernobyl bit is disturbing in a different way.

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Like a cat in a tumble dryer O.0

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